I'm (almost) a master of missed conception.
I'll wear a suit to suit your pre conception.
In the mirror stands a dwarf, doped by deception.
You want to see the rift, the tear, viscera in crimson.
So be it.
You think we've never met, followed convention.
Some think they'll never die, perpetual in motion.
Truth is the work's not how you saw devotion.
You stay the same as e'er you change, excusing none.
Take your time.
I felt the passing of a dream, well-laden.
I heard the call so sharp, so brazen.
To be ignored, so soon forgotten?
The force of change is kept within the cradle.
Take your time. For you once were mine.
16 comments:
crimson is a great color!
if devotion was not seen in the work, then what was it that finally did the trick. moon-lit flesh?
i have so many questions, but here i go trying to interpret...one should never. that would be like breaking a cardinal rule of some sorts, and i (almost) never break those.
i rather liked this one, mr. no-stars
My mind is elsewhere, I liked this one but I need to re-read it when my mind can decipher your brilliant words...
Hello y'all.
Danny: Thank you. From someone who has (almost) put me off poetry (why compete with someone who'll always kick my arse?)...!
GD - devotion comes from ... you tell me! And break away? No, that's right!
admin - ummm. I think any positive epithets should be directed elsewhere, not wasted on me, but...accepts gratefully, anyway.
Red!!!! Why do you always ask such akward questions?? Oh, that's right! You're you...! :P
No one ever 'owns' anyone, you just accept that someone might 'loan' themselves to you for a while. However long that might be.
That's my half-baked theory on that. But it doesn't change the meaning that once someone was someone else's and it doesen't really answer the question, does it?
;)
Danny - only to you maybe, to the rest of us, it's almost green, green grass.
Danny. If it weren't for the stories about your wife it would be a definite - I could lose my job in a bank as easily as any other, no problem.
It's the whole, "I want to be married to the woman of MY dreams, not someone else's" thing.
That would be the only reason. I think I could even take up snelching once or twice a ...week, day, hour?
Red.
People reading this will get very strange ideas about me!!!
Well, ok, stranger...!
Ignoring 'political correctness' (as should be done by everyone, always...shivers...ugh!) yes, I understand you.
That I do is a matter for much concern.
I am now going on holiday. (For reasons best known to the men in blue with the pointy hats and nice van with bars on the inside behind me).
Look. That line wasn't addressed to anyone I've spoken to in years.
That's your lot!!!!!!!!!!!!!11
i'm confused.. no i'm not... wait...
Red, nice to see you back. I've missed you, no really I have...
ugh!
you two please take your 'lurvemaking' elsewhere!
This is a family site!
Y'know? I've just realised that I can fit about 6 straws up my nostrils.
Does this mean I finally get to multi-snelch?
Mind you, if doing it that much means I turn into a Danny-dyke lookalike...well, it's an improvement!!!!!!!
Red, my ... er, what are you? An egg?!!!!!!!!!! :P
Loads of people miss me!
(It's why I'm still alive!) ;)
No-one could afford me...I'm priceless!
And I was just talking about the preliminaries, you know - it's not all just about the sticky bits.
It will take 3 hours to type in my word thing
Danny! Yay! I like that film.
Although it's a shame not all of them made it back.
But the dudes with the baseball bats - they were high fashion, I'm sure of it!
I always avoid commenting when people write poetry. It's not a medium I'm comfortable with in my own writing and feel I've nothing intelligent or creative to say about it or in it. However, the imagery in this is staggering - especially the first 'stanza' - 'viscera in crimson' is bloody marvellous.
Ruk - thank you. I feel exactly the same way!
Honestly! This just came out this way.
dude...I didn't know you liked to party.
I really do wish I understood all this rhyme and reason...
Red! you just blew my chance of getting invited to - ah! You are so gonna get it!
Labbie. Nah you don't! Or you wouldn't if you knew it was about me wondering why I wore odd shoes the other day!
But thanks for pretending you do!!!
are you void of all inspiration
or just driving an RV to disneyland?
old people...
go figure.
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